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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel.

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The majority of the people who are employed never engage in any activities to keep them fit, as a consequence, their health is impacted in several ways. I believe the reason behind
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 issue is most of the working class spend more time at the office and it can be overcome by
employer
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 motivating them to practice a healthy lifestyle. Companies have become more and more profit-oriented, due to
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, they encourage employees to work on weekends and
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. The time workers spend at
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 or task is currently more than they allocate for themselves.
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 recent study, it shows that any person who works more than 9 hours on a day unlikely to do any active sports but they are likely to spend time relaxing.
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, watching TV or listening to music. Employers should realize that
healthy
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work-force
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 is imperative to be successful.
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, it is important to promote a healthy lifestyle pattern. Companies can encourage their
staffs
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 to go to
gym
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 by providing more pay or settle gym
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. Let employees take a break or do flexible shifts so that they can do exercise before they get tired.
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, twice a week, provide an hour short leave. In conclusion, it has become a major problem that quite a lot of people who work never do any exercise and have more health issues. The primary reason is being at the workplace most of the day reducing their interest.
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, it can be overcome by the employer’s initiatives to promote a better lifestyle for their
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.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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