The government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Thus it’s the governments’ responsibility to ban alcohol and tobacco as they are addictive substances and harmful. How do you feel about this approach?

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Although

, there are extremely adverse effects of consuming narcotics, still prolific increase has been recorded in the intake of these unsuitable things. I strongly believe, it is the prime duty of state governing bodies to restrict the sale of these hazardous consumables.

Firstly

, I will be discussing its negative effects on a human body and,

secondly

, about the social issues regarding it. Without any doubt, the widespread use of abused substances is the prime reason for a rising index of poor health in various nations, whereas reducing the availability of them will help to improve their health status. To

further

explain, sunder diseases are caused by drinking and smoking which may lead to death in some cases.

Furthermore

, these bad habits of a person

also

increase the expenditure in terms of medical bills.

For example

, one of my neighbours was a chain smoker, and developed the symptoms of cancer, in spite of spending a huge amount of money, he couldn't survive.

Besides

this

, the rise of illegal drugs means heights of crime in society. In a broader sense, once there is an addiction towards these hard drugs, a person can go to any extend for acquiring it, and if money is not available at times, he may turn into a criminal. One clear example of

this

can be of a teenager from our town, craving for liquor made him break an ATM machine. In conclusion, consumption of alcohol and tobacco has potentially drastic effects on one's fitness, as well, on the peace and harmony of a community.

However

, it is the responsibility of a government to stop the production of these items,

moreover

,the public should be made aware of its consequences.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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