Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that in order to meet the high demands, high
school
should provide education beyond academic knowledge, promoting Fix the agreement mistake
schools
students
' life adaptability through soft skills
developing
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. There are those who believe that to solve this
issue volunteering activities among students
should be a mandatory addition to the high school
program. I strongly agree that this
practice contributes not only to the development of the psychological and emotional resilience of youngsters but also
to the expansion of their future career opportunities.
To begin
with, one of the better-known reasons why volunteering is essential for high school
students
is that it promotes increasing socially significant skills
such
as communication and relationship experience. On no account should the effects of feelings deep
loneliness and uselessness, so often familiar to adolescents, be ignored. Change preposition
of deep
Whereas participating
in joint volunteering and charity work helps young people cope with them through developing self-confidence, life satisfaction, and positive social interactions. Correct word choice
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For example
, having carried out research among Viet Nam students
, United
Nations Population Fund has revealed that voluntary activities promote reducing social exclusion of adolescents and improving Correct article usage
the United
psychological
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the psychological
school
climate.
Another cause for the necessity of volunteering in a high school
is that it promotes the development of professional skills
which could be beneficial to a future career. The reason for this
is that volunteering is considered a great way to gain the necessary experience in different fields and choice
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students
' career development. As a result
, providing extensive training, Correct word choice
and volunteers
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for practicing
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practising
such
skill
as teamwork, problem-solving, communication and networking. Fix the agreement mistake
skills
For instance
, students
are often invited to undergo unpaid internships in various companies in order to plunge into the working atmosphere and feel like a part of a team, whereas
such
internships often turn into a
permanent job Correct article usage
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offer
.
In conclusion, I am firmly convinced that volunteer work as a part of an education program should not be overlooked. Fix the agreement mistake
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due to
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and emotional health of youthCorrect article usage
the psychological
,
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and, furthermore
furthermore
, to hone professionally valuable skills
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