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now days people choose to be self-employed rather than work in organization, what are the causes? what are the disadvantages of being self-employed

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In the contemporary world, there has been a trend of starting their own
business
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 by using the sum amount of
a
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capital.
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, a lot of people opting the alternative of not doing the work for
other
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company
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, despite that, selecting the option of self-employed.
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of
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 the tendency of people and drawbacks of choosing
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 alternative. While The desire of making huge money and running the
business
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 without any restrictions are
attaracting
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attracting
 people, less experience of
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b
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usiness's cycle and
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imited source is creating problems for them.
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, Everyone wants to
earning
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 a good amount of profit
with
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 establishing his/her own
business
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.
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- After finishing the degree of
business
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, every graduate would prefer to go for a new
business
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, rather than work under the successfully organized corporation, because of the substantial income that he could earn from self-employed.
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, if you run the
company
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, there would be no chance of any limitation for making the
business
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 successful.
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, one can take his/her own decision while preparing the strategy for
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c
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ompany.
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, these are the causes of shifting the particular trend.
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, The scarcity of an experience in the newly started businesses could lead to a failure in
acheiving
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achieving
 the goals of the
company
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.
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, the limitation of sources of funding may create the hurdles in running the
self started
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business
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 since it would not survive for a long time basis.
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, these disadvantages would make the decision of the self-employed
business
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 wrong. In conclusion, the paramount requirement of money and less interference in work lead to opt the alternative of self-employed. Whereas, limited capital and less knowledge of the new
business
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 has made
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 choice risky.
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