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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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The pie charts illustrate the usage of water for various purposes in six areas of the world, namely in North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia. Overall, it can be seen that
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agriculture usage makes up a significant part mostly in all areas except North America and Europe, whereas domestic
use
 has the smallest stake. According to the data of the pie charts, it can be noticed that in Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia agricultural
use
 is over 80% and the highest percentage is in Central Asia 88%.
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, domestic and industrial purposes make up an insignificant part (not exceeding 19% together), whilst in central Asia and Africa domestic usage exceeds industrial
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 Turning to the more industrialized countries, it is clear that in Europe and in North America industrial
use
 is nearly the half of the overall figures 53% and 48% respectively, while in South America agricultural
use
 is the highest 71%.
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, agriculture exceeds domestic
use
 in all three mentioned areas. In North America agricultural
use
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omestic one, in South America figures differ by 9%,
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 in Europe agricultural purpose is more than twice the domestic
use
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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