Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views with regard to majors which students select in university. Some argue that everyone should follow his
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in studying, whereas some others believe that universities should only offer more practical fields for education, like computers and
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majors. On the one hand, according to some, which I agree with,
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of all, personal desire ought to be considered as the main crucial factor in choosing the study subject. Undoubtedly, everybody spends most of their time at work.
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, having a desirable job is critical unignorably. Occupations which are not interesting for employees will become boring and frictional soon.
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, people who love their fields are more creative and have more efficiency at work and
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can be more successful in that job rather than others.
For example
, Isfahani, an Iranian famous singer, is a physician who did not like to work as
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M.D. and
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he followed his childhood dream and start to sign which now is known as a wonderful signer in Iran.
On the other hand
, some individuals claim that only some needed courses ought to be presented at universities and colleges.
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, they believe that the
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budget should be spent
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more needed subjects rather than unnecessary ones
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as art and music. As a consequence, more money can be paid for important jobs
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as medicine and IT which leads to improvement in their educational quality.
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the chance of being hired in
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, the possibility to find a related job for a medical student is significantly more than an art student. In conclusion, I think
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ield of study has to be chosen according to personal interest, whereas some feel that just
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demand one should be studied.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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