Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is true that a successful
economy
and clean
environment
lead to a prosperous
country
,
while
other
people
think that they are
incompitable
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incompatible
incomparable
. In my opinion,
i
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believe that a clean
environment
is the result of a successful
economy
. On
one
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hand, some
people
think that the
country
could have the best
economy
and the best
environment
. A
country
's
environment
leans on the
economy
, which the
high ranked
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country
's
economy
causes a
high ranked
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high-ranked
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environment
and vice versa.
In other words
, the
country
earns their money from the sector of the
economy
.
Therefore
, the money is used
in improving
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and
maintaing
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maintain
the
environment
in various shapes
such
as constructing buildings, planting trees and plants , creating parks and gardens and more.
As a result
, a clean
environment
will attract many tourists and
creates
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jobs for many
people
.
For instance
, Japan is ranked as the
third best
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third-best
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economy
in the world and it has the best,
clean
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and charming
environment
.
On the other hand
, other
people
argue that neither
successful
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economy
nor
clean
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a clean
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environment
combined
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together
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apply
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in a
country
.
However
, the
economy
has many advantages to stimulate a
country
's
environment
, it depends on the rankings of the
country
.
Furthermore
, the countries that have the cleanest
environment
could have the worst
economy
. To illustrate, the nation of a
country
can preserve the
environment
by keeping it safe and clean.
Thus
, the livelihood
which
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earned from the
economy
would not influence the
environment
whether in a good condition or in a bad condition.
For example
, Morocco has an attractive
environment
,despite
it's
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its
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ranking in the
economy
is
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being
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the lowest. In conclusion,
while
people
may vary in their opinions ,
i
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believe that the dependency of the
environment
is on the
economy
. which results in
increase
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an increase
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in the number of tourists.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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