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Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that a successful
economy
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 and clean
environment
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 lead to a prosperous
country
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,
while
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 other
people
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 think that they are
incompitable
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incompatible
incomparable
. In my opinion,
i
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 believe that a clean
environment
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 is the result of a successful
economy
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. On
one
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the one
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 hand, some
people
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 think that the
country
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 could have the best
economy
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 and the best
environment
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. A
country
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's
environment
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 leans on the
economy
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, which the
high ranked
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high-ranked
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country
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's
economy
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 causes a
high ranked
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high-ranked
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environment
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 and vice versa.
In other words
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, the
country
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 earns their money from the sector of the
economy
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.
Therefore
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, the money is used
in improving
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to improve
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 and
maintaing
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maintain
 the
environment
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 in various shapes
such
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 as constructing buildings, planting trees and plants , creating parks and gardens and more.
As a result
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, a clean
environment
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 will attract many tourists and
creates
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create
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 jobs for many
people
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.
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, Japan is ranked as the
third best
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third-best
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economy
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 in the world and it has the best,
clean
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cleanest
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 and charming
environment
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.
On the other hand
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, other
people
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 argue that neither
successful
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a successful
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economy
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 nor
clean
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a clean
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environment
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combined
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together
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apply
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in a
country
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.
However
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, the
economy
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 has many advantages to stimulate a
country
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's
environment
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, it depends on the rankings of the
country
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.
Furthermore
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, the countries that have the cleanest
environment
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 could have the worst
economy
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. To illustrate, the nation of a
country
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 can preserve the
environment
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 by keeping it safe and clean.
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, the livelihood
which
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earned from the
economy
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 would not influence the
environment
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 whether in a good condition or in a bad condition.
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, Morocco has an attractive
environment
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 ,despite
it's
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its
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 ranking in the
economy
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is
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being
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 the lowest. In conclusion,
while
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people
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 may vary in their opinions ,
i
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 believe that the dependency of the
environment
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 is on the
economy
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. which results in
increase
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an increase
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 in the number of tourists.
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of the essay. Ensure that ideas are presented in a clear and organized manner.
task achievement
Your essay does not fully address the task. Make sure to discuss both views and give your opinion in a balanced way.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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