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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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There is no doubt that the motivation to choose a type of
accomodation
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accommodation
 is very particular and crucial for a person's well-being.
Although
 some individuals believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks to living in a
house
, others decide to live in an
apartment
. I agree with the former statement and in
this
 essay, I will explain why I believe that the benefits to (of) living in a
house
 outweigh the drawbacks in comparison with living in an
apartment
.
Firstly
, the negative of living in a
house
 compared to living in an
apartment
, (-)is that the former is less affordable than the latter. The reason for
this
 is that a
house
 has more
space
 and area than an
apartment
, (-)so that the cost of living is more expensive. Even when deciding to buy one.
As a result
, some people choose to live in an
apartment
 and have less (fewer) expenses. Whereas some who have more financial conditions (financial means or just means), choose to live in a
house
 in order to have more comfort.
However
, the main advantage of living in a
house
 is that It has more
space
 and
privacy
.
This
 is because when living in an
apartment
, we have a huge number of neighbours
,
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 while living in a
house
 we have fewer.
This
 is a problem because, as we do not know the intention of everyone, when living in an
apartment
 we are more exposed to gossip, as a consequence most of our
privacy
 is taken.
On the other hand
, living in a
house
 enables us to have less interference from others and more
privacy
,
thus
 there is more
space
 and green area around to (for) leisure and relaxation in comparison with an
apartment
.
This
 is a great choice especially for a family with children. In conclusion, considering that choosing a place to live is very important, I strongly believe that the advantages of
privacy
,
space
 and comfort that comes with living in a
house
 outweigh the disadvantages of (the) price compared with living in an
apartment
.
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