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In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacation time each year. In the other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time.

#countries #employees #two #weeks #vacation #time #year #four #six
Every company has its own procedures and policies. And they
are differ
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 from others especially if they are different
counrties
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countries
. Let’s consider in detail the conditions of paid vacation. Some employers agree to give two weeks of paid vacation for their workers once a year, others give from four till six weeks. There is no doubt that a great number of people want to be on holidays more. In these cases
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they can both have a rest somewhere abroad and spend more spare time with their relatives.
On the other hand
, some people aren’t in
favor
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 of long-termed vacations. They prefer to
work
 hard. Two weeks are rather convenient for them.
For example
, my best friend dislikes
to be
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 on vacation
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so long. She is a fan of her job and she prefers to develop her skills at
work
.
Also
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I’m pretty sure that employers want their subordinates
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ork more to improve the company’s status. But at the same time employees must have full rest to their
work
 will be effective. To sum it up, I am completely convinced that every choice depends on a person. He or she should read the manual carefully and don’t be in a hurry to make the fast decision not to face
with
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bosses’ misunderstanding.
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