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Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time Others belive that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply Discuss both views and give your opinion

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We are living in a world that
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orld population has been increasing at
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xponential rate.
Accordingly
,the need for buildings is growing day by day.
However
, many
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 that it is crucial to construct strong buildings whereas others argue that it is more important to build quickly and affordable places in
order
 to meet high demands.I support the
first
 idea and I will outline my point of view in
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rimary concern for constructors.Because people need houses in
order
 to provide a secure place
to
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 themselves.The place should protect
them
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outdoor threats
such
 as bad weather conditions or natural disasters.Especially, houses ought to be constructed by considering
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ossibility of these disasters like earthquake.When earthquakes hit,buildings have to endure without collapsing. Following
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, there is
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another concern that we need to accelerate construction works in
order
 to meet
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ising demands of housing.
Besides
, these buildings should be affordable for everyone to prevent homelessness.In
order
 to provide
this
, many safety regulations are dismissed by authorities.
However
, it has to be known that
this
 attitude put people more danger than homelessness.To illustrate,when buildings collapse, many people probably lose their lives. To conclude,
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ack of accommodation is a serious issue for people.
However
, people’s safety should be considered at
first
 when construction
begin
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.
Instead
 of building cheap houses without precautions, we need to focus on providing a safe shelter for people.
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