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You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have an acquaintance who lives there. Write a letter to the acquaintance. In your letter •explain your situation •say why you feel unsure about living in the city •ask some question about life in the city

#job #move #city #acquaintance #lives #•explain #situation #•say #•ask #life
Dear
Mrs.
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 Bellan, I am writing
you
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 to
ask
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 give me a hand related to the tips of living in Hamilton City. The matter is that I have obtained a proposal to occupy
a
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 post of
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senior project manager in the investment department of
ArcelorMittal
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 steelmaking plant. They expect my positive feedback during
this
 month. Taking into account that I have never been there before I do not have the faintest idea about the basic information required for
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relocation budget estimation as cost assessment of living there.
That is
 why I feel uncomfortable. I would like to know the accommodation rates or prices for houses and apartments. I
also
 would like to get
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 about the features of available residential areas
since
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 different points of view
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ecological
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 impact of local enterprises, transport infrastructure and leisure facilities. I’ll appreciate any other valuable advice concerning living in Hamilton. Could you give me some idea related to the aforementioned issues or some internet links to explore everything? Thank you in advance! Yours sincerely Alex.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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