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Behaviour and lifestyles vary from country to country. Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

For
decades
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 different countries have had various cultural peculiarities.
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 some believe that the local lifestyle should be followed by foreigners, I am convinced that tourists ought to reach
the
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 balance between their own
beliefs
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 and local culture in order not to be considered
an
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impolite
person
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. On the one hand, behaving under cultural
norms
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 will be believed to be an acknowledgement of local
beliefs
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 and
rules
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. Being a visitor to a country and not abiding by national
rules
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 is likely to be thought of as disrespect to
dwellers
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the dwellers
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as well as
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 general impoliteness.
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, Japan is well-known for its strict cultural
norms
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 that the nation is highly proud of and lives
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according to
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them
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. One of the Japanese traditions is to be barefoot inside a house
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while
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, while
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 in the
USA
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USA,
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 it is an average situation not to take off footwear indoors.
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, it may be judged as rude impoliteness when an American enters the house in Japan in shoes.
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, knowing and abiding by the local
rules
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 may be crucial in avoiding cultural misunderstandings.
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, some cultural
norms
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 may be contrary to one’s personal or religious
beliefs
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. On
this
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 occasion, I am convinced that a person has to behave politely but not overstep their own culture.
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, many Europeans have become curious tourists to Muslim-related countries and
accepted
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 their religious peculiarities being on vacation there.
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,
the
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a
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 part of Islamic
women
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is
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are
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 obliged to wear their national clothing known as burkas that cover 99% of their bodies. At the same time, European
women
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 are not forced to wear
such
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 dresses as
that is
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 against their cultural
beliefs
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.
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, in a few Arabic countries,
women
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 are not allowed to have their personal vehicles
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while
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, while
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 European
women
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 may use a car during their stay there as a tourist.
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, various nations hold astonishingly different cultural
rules
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 than others. Not following a nation's specific behaviour or moral laws
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 visiting a country may be considered rude and impolite
,
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however
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, I believe that an individual should not behave
accordingly
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 if those
rules
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 go against their personal cultural
norms
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.

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task
Be clear in the intro. State your view in one simple sentence.
structure
In each paragraph, state one main idea and give a clear, real example.
structure
End with a short line that restates your view.
language
Use simple words and check grammar. Shorten long sentences for better flow.
content
The main idea of balance is clear.
content
You use examples from real places to show your point.
structure
You try to link ideas with words that show order.
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