Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

It is argued that if conglomerates and factories, as well as their workers, change their operations to rural regions,
traffic
and housing issues in urban cities can be solved. I believe that
this
will certainly reduce
traffic
congestions in major cities,
however
, high property prices will remain unresolved. The movement of the large working population to rural areas will have a positive impact in reducing the number of cars on highways,
therefore
, lesser
traffic
jams. The majority of the workforce in metropolises commute with their cars to their workplace. As
such
, if big businesses decide to leave the major cities, a large portion of the population and their automobiles are expected to depart as well, ensuring a smoother flow of vehicles in
such
areas. The Roh administration,
for instance
, moved its public organisations to a countryside named "Sejong" and the Mapo freeway saw an immediate decline of
traffic
delays and accidents during peak hours.
However
, housing prices in megacities will continue to rise regardless of the locations of businesses activities.
This
is because countryside regions provide insufficient educational institutions,
thus
, they are unable to host the employees' families, giving them no other option but to purchase houses in two locations.
For example
, despite shifting the operations of public companies to Sejong, property prices in Mok-dong, an education zone in Seoul skyrocketed. Unless local authorities are to develop a full-fledged infrastructure, the demand for houses in major cities are sought to increase. In conclusion,
this
essay argued that while moving the majority of the urban workforce out to remote regions may solve the
traffic
delay problem, it is highly unlikely to see greater availability of affordable housing in industrially advanced cities as rural places are poorly equipped with educational facilities that can accommodate employees' families as well.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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