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In the past when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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students tend to study in the universities of their home town.
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people get easily attracted and studying abroad has become quite common. I would like to explain
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ew pros and cons of the students studying abroad.
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 with, students those who study abroad can become proficient in language by communicating with different nationality students to develop
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 relationships which may become a very huge contact in future. Graduating from the reputed university would likely help in getting a decent job with a good salary. Adaptation skills to the new culture and climate
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 developed which helps them to survive better. Away from the home could make the students
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take more financial responsibilities in
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 way they are able to learn money managing skills. Craving for
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higher education in abroad would benefit the students to stand independently in
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society.
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let us consider some group of introvert students who doesn’t communicate with the public around. It would be a major problem for them to adjust
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foreign universities. They might feel depressed some times.
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few people might not cope up with extreme climate changes in countries like
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SA. Some may feel lonely staying away from the home. Students who are weak in their money management skills might face difficulties like wrong investments or credit decisions. To conclude, people studying abroad can gain benefits from their academic life and become an independent individual with
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riendly
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 network.
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ew people. So for the people studying abroad need to have an open mind to face all the challenges in their path to
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 a successful career.
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