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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The given bar charts illustrate information about the
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 steps of the UK’s graduate and postgraduate students who did not prefer full-time job after graduating from the university in 2008. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of both graduate and postgraduate students gave their preference to
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 4.5 times lesser than non-workers. Turning to the postgraduates, it can be noticed that figures of postgraduates who preferred
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those who continued
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 1625, while volunteers were too little 345.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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