Some groups of people have benefited from modern communication technology but some people have not benefited at all. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no room for doubts that modern
communication
technologies have been changed our
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.
However
,
this
rapid advancement has not impacted positively to all population segments in the same extent. I agree that benefits from those technologies are only for
for
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a group of people. Benefits from those technologies are still services for
well educated
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people with easy
access
to it. Most of the users of modern
communication
technologies are
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people. They are involved with
electronical
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electronic
devices in early age and they get used to
leverage
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it for many purposes
such
as design,
communication
to name a few because they have special instructions and classes for those objectives.
For instance
,
high quality
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schools destinate more than four hours a week to activities leveraged by electronic devices compared with
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schools which utilize one hour or less per week to do things leveraged by some
communication
technologies.
This
does not take into account electronic devices quality which suggests that
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students are more likely to receive benefits from
communication
technologies. Despite technologies enable to us transact bytes almost everywhere in the world,
communication
technologies uses are concentrated on urban and
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areas.
This
does not allow the benefits from
communication
technologies
such
as
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nternet, computer and phones reach to everyone in the world.
For example
, nowadays, millions of people in rural areas in non-developed countries cannot
access
to the internet, they cannot
access
to the biggest knowledge base created for the humankind in our history because those countries cannot afford spend resources in
create
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communication
infrastructure in remote areas.
Thus
, millions of people cannot benefit from
communication
technologies as people in urban and rich countries do. In conclusion, I agree that benefits from those technologies are only for
for
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a group of people. Benefits from those technologies are received by
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people who can
access
easily to it.
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