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With the pressures on today's young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed at the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, the world is changing rapidly and dramatically.
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These days
, youths are facing more academic pressures by their parents, who want to opt good marks in the academic subjects rather than non-academic. So, some people think that these subjects should be eliminated from the syllabus. I cent
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 disagree with the aforesaid statement.
First
 and foremost, nowadays, each and every
children
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 face peer pressures from the elder ones, due to they wish their kids to excel in the academic curriculum. They
knoe
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know
 that these subjects will decide their future than non-academic ones.
However
, children can excel through sports and
cookry
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cookery
also
. Sports
altheletes
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athletes
 are the brand
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ambassadors
ambassador
 of any nation
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 because they represent the whole nation at
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nternational level.
For example
, in cricket
worldcups
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world cups
world cup
 or football
worldcups
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world cups
world cup
, people know them by their countries and if they win,
then
 the nation will glorious over the world.
Moreover
, cookery and swimming are, not only practical skills but
also
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 skills. Through them, many people brought name and fame across the globe. So, schools and
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 must encourage those students, who have innate talents.
Also
, they should have to take a holistic approach to teach these subjects.
On the other hand
,
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these days
,
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competition has increased greatly. Every child is competing with the child with
next
 door. Owing to, after school there are private
tutions
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tutors
, where tutors teach hoe to compete
instead
 of co-operative.
Also
, sometimes, children are not
keen
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 interested in non-academic subjects, due to weaker physical body structure and lack of skills.
Furthermore
, high paid jobs require more academic education and parents always eager to acquire them. To conclude, if kids must teach
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appropriately
appropriate
 in the non-academic subjects,
then
 they will definitely achieve the name and fame. So, these subjects should not be removed from the curriculum.
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