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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ever-increasing
of
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number of
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 individuals and
organizations
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organisations
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 who are contributing their
money
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 to the government’s budget through paying taxes. It is often argued that
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 is a positive way to strengthen
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the country
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country
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country,
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 whilst others disagree and think that the
money
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 should be spent on other purposes. These ideas will be discussed in
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 essay.
It is clear that
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 the
money
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 that governments get from
the
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taxes
are
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 the main source to run their systems.
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, it is not only used to upgrade infrastructures
such
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 as electricity,
road
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roads
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,
school
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schools
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…but
also
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 spent on new technology in industry and agriculture.
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,
taxing
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taxation
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 is the
citizen’s
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citizens’
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 duty to make the whole economy wealthier and wealthier.
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, in many developed
countries
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countries,
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 when you get a job, your employer will automatically help you
tax
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 by subtracting
money
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 from your salary.
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, many feel uncomfortable
to put
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putting
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 aside a portion of their profits for
tariff
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taxes
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, they think
that is
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 their own
money
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, authorities do not help them
in making
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make
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 it. They want to invest
further
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 or upgrade
manufacture
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manufacturing
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. What would happen if individualism tends to increase? There would be no
total
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 developed fields in every country.
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, in a country where no one or company pay
for tax
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taxes
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,
so
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how can they find the
fund
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funds
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 for building basic infrastructure In conclusion,
while
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 the benefits of
taxing
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taxation
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 are particularly the modern equipment that allows people to have a better living standard, good opportunities for business. Some still feel not
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satisfied with
this
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 point, yet it is better for the whole development.

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coherence
Try to make your arguments clearer and easier to follow. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to organize your points.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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