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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below illustrate Grange
Park
 when it was
initially
 constructed and present day. As can be seen, there are three principal changes: on the west, middle, and east side of the
park
. Whereas north-west rose garden and both gates from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street remain unchanged. A closer look at major change, the performing stage, on the west side, was expanded and developed into a amphitheater for cencerts. In the center of Grange
Park
, the fountain was replaced by new rose garden, surrounded by seats which originally located around the
park
. To the east of the
park
, rose garden and pond for water plants, north-east side were demolished and built into café and playground. To the south-east of the
park
, glasshouse was knocked-down and replaced by water feature, and ,
moreover
, it locate
next
 to the new entrace to underground parking lot.
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  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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