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Children are engaged in different kind of paid work. Many of people consider it inappropriate and many think it as a learning experience for taking responsibility? Give your opinions and views on this statement?

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In the modern world, doing a part-time job is common among youngsters. Some people believe that it is not suitable for children while others argue that it is another way of learning. Throughout
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both views and provide my personal opinion.
To begin
 with, the sole priority of teenagers would be
achieveing
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achieving
 academic goals, not working. But engaging in employment can shift the focus from studies to money which is dangerous. The foundation
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 a successful life is education and
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focusing on work could ruin the future of a child.
For example
, a study done in Europe has found out that 80% of children who do casual jobs ended up failing academically.
Additionally
, the young generation can have access to
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nwanted amount of cash when doing a job which could lead them to a whole lot of troubles.
Thus
, working while learning is not appropriate for young adults.
However
, part-time work can be an exceptional way of learning how to be responsible. Sometimes, it is difficult to get the practical
knowlege
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knowledge
 of being a
resposible
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responsible
 person by only studying at school.
On the other hand
, a part-time job means endless responsibilities and it would give offsprings the important opportunity to learn how to be responsible.
For example
, my nephew is 16 years old and he is already a manager at a popular retail store. He has already gained valuable experiences when compared to the other children at his age.
Hence
, doing casual jobs while learning could help children to be responsible. To sum up,
although
 it is said that teenagers should not work while studying, I believe it is important as it can help to create a responsible citizen for
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society.
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