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Not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects to the society?

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Most students have less willingness to choose
science
 subjects in colleges in many countries,which causes some impacts on our society. In the following essay, the reasons behind it and the possible effects are going to be discussed.
First
 of all, many students have less motivation to study
science
 subjects because of the influence of parents. Parents suggest children
to
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choose professions that can make more money like medicine or computer
science
 because getting richer is an indicator of success.
Secondly
, providing
science
 subjects do not have enough resources to attract students to do research. Students who want to pursue a
science
 career need to study abroad.
However
, the tuition is too high to afford, which causes the change in their professional pursuit. For
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science
 development,
science
 is a foundation of innovation. Without innovation , a country just relies on traditional tries that mainly depend on
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abour force,which causes those countries to lose their international competitiveness. Eventually,it leads to stagnation of a country’s
further
 development causing economical difficulties.
On the other hand
, if nobody studies
science
,knowledge will be lost in the future.
As a result
, countries will lack specialists
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science
 and need to depend on other countries. In the long run, they cannot keep up with the pace of other countries. In the conclusion, there are many factors to decrease students’ willingness to choose
science
 subjects like whether they can get
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igher payment or have enough resource do research in the future. When nobody
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otivation
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this
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 on nation’s competitiveness and financial problems.
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