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In some countries, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 present world, many people think to have a
baby
 late in their
life
 while others think to have a
baby
 earlier.
This
 essay completely agrees with the suggestion that having babies early in
life
. In
this
 essay,we will discuss the advantages as well as the disadvantages and mention my opinion regarding
this
.
Firstly
, some family member as mother and father think they need to secure their
life
 before creating their offspring.
For instance
, they believe to secure all supplements for the children
such
 as clothes and foods and even the toys by saving enough money
furthermore
, try to be professional in parental skills by learning
this
 kind of field as the duty to raise a child is not easy. I think that will be a positive point to have a child late in the
parent
's
life
.
Secondly
, the disadvantages of having a child late in their
life
 are many.
For example
, the
parent
 reached to age let them be imperfect to deal with the teenager as well as the huge differents between
parent
 and their youngster ideas and thinking ways will act as struggling issues so, the
parent
 who thought to have a
baby
 late need to consider
this
 point. In conclusion, in my opinion, if the parents looking to provide a high-quality
life
 for their children
then
 they have to wait until make that happens.
However
, if they late to raise and having a
baby
 because they escape away from responsibilities they have to consider that the range of the ages will cause problems. I recommended helping
our
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 generation by supporting the
parent
 before having a family.
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