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The pie charts compare the proportion of various nutrients available in 2 dinners namely
medium
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potato
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 and macaroni. Overall, the macaroni has mire carbohydrates and saturated fats than a
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potato
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, whereas the latter has large quantities of protein and glucose than the former. It is evident that the protein content in a
medium
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potato
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 is one-fourth of the total nutritional value, while it is just above 11 per
cent
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 in a macaroni.
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, the glucose content and other nutrients constitute 15 per
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 each in a
medium
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potato
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, but it is 5 per
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 and 11 per
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 of other nutrients and glucose respectively in a macaroni.
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, more than half of the nutrition in a macaroni is
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arbohydrate, which
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 a baked
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 is 35 per
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.
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, the saturated fat is about one-fifth in the macaroni, whereas it is one-tenth in a
medium
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potato
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