Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, people hold
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ifferent view as to whether
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must study topics in the school that they do not like.
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essay totally approves the argument of broad knowledge is essential in a competitive world and do not represent waste of time. The following paragraph will illustrate
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issue and facets with supportive examples. On the one hand, students with a wide range of knowledge in several
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might be self-sufficient in modern times. To explain, when human being dedicated a part of their time enriching their minds, and in studying lots of techniques; they can easily complete different life challenges
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as, find desire jobs and get better employment opportunities.
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, people develop more skill than normal people, and it is really appreciative for companies. To illustrate, the recruiters select students who are skilled in various field, because
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their responsibility and more capability to find solutions using their background. On the other hands, individuals that have not expertise in many topics are probably less valuable to a company.
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if a person just focusing
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study one subject, it is probably he will be an expert in that major.
However
, he will not be able to go
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ontract to people who prove
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e a multitask. To exemplify, Apple an important tech company, provide
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ontract to people that demonstrated, a proficient in languages, programming, mathematics, history and general knowledge. In conclusion, children should invest their time in
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tudy all the various topic offered in school, because it will be relevant in the future if they want to be successful
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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