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Studies show that crime rates are lower among those with educational degrees. Therefore, the best way to reduce the crime rate is to educate criminals while they are still in prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that educated people tend to be
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a low-abiding citizen
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 citizens. Personally, I completely agree with the idea that implementation of educating programs in prisons could help prisoners to receive a legal job and
as a result
 to become
a responsible members
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responsible members
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 of
society
. One reason why
this
 approach should be realized is that high
education
 and work experience has already proven to be successful at changing people’s mindset. Inmates need
education
 in order to successfully reenter
society
 once they are released and use the knowledge and skills they have learned to obtain a job in order to support themselves and their families. The United States is a prime example where people who were in prison can have another chance to start a new life with new tools
such
 as
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ew profession or new abilities. The other reason why it is crucial to concentrate on inmates while they are in prison is making
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ealthy
society
. Almost nobody is born a criminal. Most criminals are victims of circumstances. In fact
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most of them come from the poor strata of the
society
 and lack of
education
.
Education
 may change the situation for good. If prisoners receive an opportunity to learn and acquire vocational or academic degrees from prison, they are more likely to find employment upon
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 release. When they have a secure job and a means of living, most people will not want to get into crime again. To conclude,
education
 improves a person’s employability. Just because someone is a prisoner, it does not mean that they cannot learn or acquire degrees. In fact, educating prisoners is one of the best things we can do for their rehabilitation and successful induction into the
society
.
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