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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every person in a certain period of his life starts to seek for a vacant position, hoping to find a great
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, there are debates between those who believe that a higher education diploma provides better career opportunities and those who convinced that relevant experience is more important to get a well-paid
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ell-known fact that educational institutions usually provide students
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not only theoretical knowledge but
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 essential social skills which are crucial for
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 in sales.
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achelor curriculum. Ability to
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 in a team and good communication skills play
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ey role during employees’ selection in sales companies.
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, candidates with higher education often have more chances to get
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 desired
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 in comparison with experienced
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-seekers.
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, not all jobs are like that. Each object of art often involves certain pairs of well-trained hands.
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work
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 with delicate raw materials
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 special gentle technics.
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, every fashion house has dozens of professional needlewomen who create manually amazing decorative elements and these specialists honed their skills by decades of hard
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 is why famous designers trust their masterpieces only to experienced employees
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 of educated one’s.
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, to get
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access in
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areer path in the field of art have become almost impossible without relevant experience. In conclusion, it seems there are different occasions of getting
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reat
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niversity degree is
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aramount requirement for some jobs,
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 experience may be more important for others.
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, getting acquainted in advance with skills which are mandatory for the desired position will help one to make
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 right choice.

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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