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Traffic congestion is a serious problem in most big cities. Some people believe that governments should build more roads. What do you think about the solution?

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Nowadays,
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traffic jam is a vital problem in developing countries. While authorities have faced
this
 issue for a long time, some people
racken
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 that they have to plan more roads. From my point of view,
this
 would partially solve
this
.
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discuss
this
 solution, along with my opinion. To start with, Traffic congestion has been a growing problem with the growth of population in most cities around the
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.
Although
 most those big cities have a great infrastructure, they are struggling with the new people
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immigrating
emigrating
migrating
 to them every single year. Not only does
this
 trend affect the increasing number of
vechiles
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vehicles
 on roads, but it damages the environment by the carbon dioxide
emmissions
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emissions
.
This
 can be exemplified by a survey conducted by the department of traffic, faculty of civil engineering, Baghdad University, which has proven that more people are
purchacing
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purchasing
 private cars every day, and
as a result
, they spend more time on the road because of the traffic jams.
In addition
 to that, I believe that building more street will not help
mitigating
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 the major issue.
Otherwise
, enhancing
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public transportation, and plan more trains' roads would be a reasonable suggestion to that.
Although
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building
 more roads might decrease the
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 of time people spending on their way to their
destenation
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destination
, nither it will reduce the
numberof
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number of
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vehicles
 nor the rate of
oplution
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pollution
population
 in the air. In conclusion, having presented the ideas above, it can be
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 that
this
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