It might be said that protecting the environment is the most important challenge facing governments today. How important do you feel this issue is? Are there other challenge which are of equal or greater importance?

In recent days, the question of whether the most significant task of governments is protecting the
environment
or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
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appealing, but some analysis will show that it is one of their main priority and that other options are
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considerable. Admittedly, it is correct that environmental protection should be among governments’ greatest concerns.
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no coordinated measures from national and global organisations, the
environment
will be worse, leading to a more unstable world for everyone.
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, by focusing too much on
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topic, all nations could run the risk of neglecting a range of different challenges. Foremost among these other challenges
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to be the question of overpopulation, which is dramatic these days. In fact, the growth of human numbers beyond the ability of
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uman to support themselves
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as shelters, food. If
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losing combat of the already
environment
damage. Another challenge which is at least equal to the
environment
is to reduce disease in developing countries.
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, during COVID-19, these governments could not control the number of infected cases, leads many deaths per day and
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figures
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accine. In conclusion, the
environment
is not only a major priority. It should be as one among a range of issues to be solved, and the solutions themselves could lead to better preservation of nature.
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