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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Other people opine that
job
 stability is essential while some value gratification at
work
. I believe that a
job
 that gives people contentment is more paramount than a secured but customary
job
.   On the one hand,
job
 security is targeted by some
job
-hunters since they believe that
this
 will lead them to a successful career over a period of time.
This
 kind of culture is mostly seen in the older generations, maybe because of life experiences. As people grow older, they want assurance and stability that even if there are younger and newly hired employees with higher sets of skills, they will be indispensable and be kept in the company.
For instance
, younger generations are  more
skillful
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 when it comes to computer skills than older people.  
On the other hand
, people have different ways of satisfying themselves when it comes to
work
 basing on their own preferences. Some working populations, mostly young professionals, believe that satisfaction and autonomy are crucial at
work
 for it enables them to
work
 effectively. Their competitive yet vibrant personalities
enables
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 them to project their career into a wider range of possibilities.
This
 is true when
is
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it
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 comes to the advertising company, it allows them to create and produce
u
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nconventional yet effective method to publicize a certain product.   In conclusion, a stable
job
 is important for people
n
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eed to pay necessities and even afford luxuries.
However
, I believe that a sense of
fulfillment
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 and a feeling of reward will lead to a happier and healthier life which is I think is more valuable.
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