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The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, natural resources became the major source for generating energy, especially
oil
 and gas are
in
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 the top of the list. As the global demand soars,
oil
 exploration companies try to expand their wings to remote or
un-explored
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 areas. I firmly believe, the drawbacks associated with it will overweigh the possible value additions.
This
 essay will focus on the negative effects of exploring places for
oil
 and gas extraction. On the one hand,
oil
 and gas are the trivial driving factors for human commutation and industrial growth. Alongside it helps to ease your work, as many of the modern age
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 are fuelled or designed to function with either
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oil
 or gas as the primary energy.
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, nations across the world noticed a significant improvement in their growth with the advent and
adoptation
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adaptation
adoption
 of
oil
 and
gas dependent
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equipments
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equipment
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.
On the other hand
, companies in
e
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nergy exploration sector are looking to take control of
oil rich
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 remote places.
This
 aids in expanding
their
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 business base to compete with peers and secure their market place. As an effect, inhabitants are suffering
with
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 health hazards, risk of being exposed to major catastrophes
such
 as
oil
 spill, gas leaks among the few.
For instance
, a natural gas transportation pipe which runs under the village blasted in late 2017, which resulted in vanishing the whole area and the villagers.
Finally
,
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even though
 extracting
oil
 from all the available locations will help humans to take the growth
further
, but it raises concerns about
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humans and their right to live
in
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inland
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l
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and. Exploration of
oil
 and gas in remote places will be a major threat to the existence of the place and its inhabitants or
indegenious
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indigenous
 community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exploitation
  • economic growth
  • infrastructure
  • underdeveloped areas
  • environmental cost
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable development
  • geopolitical issues
  • resource control
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