Some people think it is important to keep and maintain old buildings rather than replacing them with modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Protecting an old building with history is
very
essential, Rephrase
apply
according to
a few people, compared to the reconstruction of the entire structure. Personally, I completely agree with this
, as the importance of any old construction is forever carried in its past, and to re-model
the whole place would cost a fortune.
There is a history and an emotion carried in every building standing tall from the past and preserving them by proper maintenance is necessary as these places are still quite stable, being made of the quality of materials. Correct your spelling
remodel
Consequently
, there are many, who has
an emotional connection with it and carry a strong opinion to protect it from destruction. There are many Correct subject-verb agreement
have
such
constructions in India; for example
, Taj
Mahal, Charminar and othersCorrect article usage
the Taj
,
Remove the comma
apply
repaired
and maintained frequently as Add a missing verb
are repaired
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
holds
a great value in every citizen's heart. Correct subject-verb agreement
hold
Hence
, these structures need to keep
safe as they are immensely important and they cherish Wrong verb form
be kept
its
past and value Correct pronoun usage
their
its
presence.
Correct pronoun usage
their
Similarly
, demolishing an old building to replace it with a modern one will be way expensive
compared to repairing the same one and maintaining it from Correct quantifier usage
more expensive
time-to-time
. Correct your spelling
time to time
By
frequent repairs, there would be no noticeable damages and can substantially sustain strong for a very long period. Change preposition
With
For instance
, using those finances efficiently for a better purpose such
as to build more schools and hospitals would help the poor more adequately. Therefore
, spending a fortune in
replacing these old buildings is not appreciated by many.
Change preposition
on
To conclude
, it is definitely necessary to preserve and protect the old builds than to re-do them from the
scratch with modern designs, not only as the history and importance of it Correct article usage
apply
is
particularly personal to the people but Change the verb form
are
also
the
amount of credit spent on repairing is far less than Correct word choice
because the
re-modeling
it entirely.Change the spelling
re-modelling
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