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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems?

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Teachers around the world often cite the students' misbehaviour as the reason for leaving their jobs. Many educators seek to answer the question of why children behave in
such
 a manner, and how to cope with the issue.
This
 essay will outline several possible causes and suggest
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prospective solutions. One of the reasons why pupils' inappropriate behaviour could develop at
school
 is the fact that they do not have a supportive environment at home. In order to compensate for the lack of parents’ attention, they may provoke fights or arguments at
school
. If parents spent more quality time with their children and listened to them, the children would feel more comfortable at
school
 and would not cause troubles.
Furthermore
, I believe, it is parents, but not only teachers, who should make children understand the impact of their behaviour on others. The
second
 cause of worsening student conduct is
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poor
school
 management. It is often the case that
school
 authorities concentrate on exam results and other performance indicators, and neglect the individuals behind
this
.
As a result
, pupils may rebel against the system. To prevent
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unpleasant consequences,
school
 boards should change their formal approach to a more personalised one.
Additionally
,
school
 policies should include clear rules, sanctions and rewards, so that every student can understand what is expected from them. To sum up, misbehaviour is a global problem and it cannot be solved by schools alone. Parents should
also
 take responsibility to create more favourable conditions for pupils' learning, development and well-being.
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