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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to secondary to universities too much time is spent on learning facts and not on enough learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #levels #education #schools #universities #time #facts #skills
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 so many generations, importance
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 given
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 teaching theory rather than giving hands-on experience to
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 in every step of academics. I agree that
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 method is being extensively followed in many institutions even though it is not beneficial for
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 in the long run. Emphasis is given to the theoretical approach because the structure is defined in a way to
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 the assessment of
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. The evaluation process involves a pattern where
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 are expected to answer the questions on an answer sheet which will test the basic understanding of the individuals. In order to succeed in the examinations, practical knowledge will not be of much help to the individuals rather the expectation is how they effectively put
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 paper.
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,
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 don't perform anything practically until they start working where it is required to independently show their skills. So, people always give significance to
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factual studies ignoring the struggle
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 have to go through when they start their professional careers.
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, it is not possible to assess a person completely in terms of pragmatic skills considering the limited time set by educational authorities for conducting exams.
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, not all institutions have the required infrastructure where practical knowledge can be taught and tested.
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 requires a major transformation in the education system in terms of facilitation which is not going to be simple. For all these reasons a considerable amount of time is spent on learning theory in all the levels of education until it is a necessity.
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, the current procedure does not concentrate on learning practical skills but
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 theoretical knowledge which has to be changed in the coming years.
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task response
The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth in discussing the pros and cons of theoretical vs practical learning. More detailed examples and clear reasoning would strengthen the response.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, but the essay lacks clear logical progression in presenting the main points. Use of linking words and cohesive devices would improve coherence and cohesion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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