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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree

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Online shopping becomes a part of life to everyone due to its cheap cost and immense availability of categories. It has been developing in a very fast manner, which leads the local shops to face huge loss and shut down. The internet shoppers surging over year-on-year which could be a worrying factor for physical stores and a major portion of the population consider it would force the sellers to close. As a step forward, the development should be addressed in a balanced manner which creates a win-win scenario.
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 & foremost, internet purchase has been warmly welcomed due to its penetration, the product reaches even to a small town.
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, the buyers no need to visit and they can conveniently purchase from a smart device.
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 there are oppositions on massive discounts offered by online portals, majority of the population appreciate that and
on the other hand
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, direct stores could not offer huge discounts and suffered due to costs occurred by real estate, employee’s salary and maintenance. As an example, the companies in India responded to the scenario and started an online portal to buy, parallel to the physical store but the prices are high compared to a dedicated portal. The situation could be addressed by encouraging local stores to be assigned as a distribution centre to handle the delivery as well as sell their own products.
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 would generate accessibility to a wide range of products and keep the consumer to shop in the locality.
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, Reliance retail mart is one of the leading online retailers and the company has a different business idea which organizes the existing local shop to the central warehouse and delivers to the customers from the local centre. It benefits both consumers and sellers. As a conclusion, I would assert, web buy is drastically increasing and it could lead local shops to close, but not entirely because still, people love to visit and feel the product before purchase.
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