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Becoming a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sport personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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Being famous is something every individual has a dream about.
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 it brings many
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 along, it does make the celebrity
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 distressing at the same time. In my opinion, the stardom, the stars enjoy in turn of the invaded private
life
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 is surely worth it. On the one hand, the famous people are undoubtedly under constant scrutiny by the media and public.
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 is because after becoming famous, they become public figures and people take it as their fundamental right to know every detail about their professional and personal
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 making it inevitable for them to escape the chase. The paparazzi always follow them and keep the followers updated about their trips, visits, latest trends and
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, but
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 a matter of apprehension for the celebrities. Reason being that they do not have a sense of privacy and are usually under tremendous pressure to be at their best. There have been
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 when these famous people were
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 dragged into matters just to tarnish their hard-earned reputation.
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, it is rightly said that
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ood image is easily earned bt hard to maintain.
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, the perks enjoyed by the renowned personalities are worth the compromises they do. The level of comfort and luxury they enjoy is
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efty amount of money for their projects, plus the endorsements that they get take them to the
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 of no less than a king or a queen. it is quite apparent from the lifestyle of these eminent people that they enjoy their
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 to the fullest and the entire credit goes to the media and their followers who make them starts.
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, the treatment they receive from the public services like security, priority at the queues,
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exemptions
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foundation
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eneral public has to
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 with make it an added advantage.
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, being a star comes with an absolute reward
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 can be sacrificed for being available to the public always. In conclusion, I believe that
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iggest achievement a person can have is the being inspiration for others which surely these famous people do. The problems they face while enjoying the top-notch
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 is something which can be compromised for the same.
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