Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

There is a fact that companies that operate across many countries are driving small-sized enterprises out of the marketplace.
the trend has been recording several drawbacks, I am supposed that the positive effects outweigh the negative ones
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It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the interrupter First of all. Consider adding the comma(s).

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of all, it is the replacement of multinational companies that
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The verb benefits does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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customers in terms of price.
In other words
, multinational enterprises have competitive advantages in terms of assets, facilities and supply chain in comparisons with small businesses. They can produce massively products thanks to extensive factories and technological innovations and
launch their merchandise at much lower prices than local businesses. Those who make a purchase of the products not only benefit lower cost but
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation


To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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