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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

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There is a fact that companies that operate across many countries are driving small-sized enterprises out of the marketplace.
Although
 the trend has been recording several drawbacks, I am supposed that the positive effects outweigh the negative ones
First
 of all, it is the replacement of multinational companies that
benefits
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 customers in terms of price.
In other words
, multinational enterprises have competitive advantages in terms of assets, facilities and supply chain in comparisons with small businesses. They can produce massively products thanks to extensive factories and technological innovations and
then
 launch their merchandise at much lower prices than local businesses. Those who make a purchase of the products not only benefit lower cost but
also
 much higher quality.The toothpaste product of Unilever - P
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