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Most countries do not recycle their waste like paper, glass and aluminium cans. Why does this happen and what steps can be taken to encourage recycling.

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In
this
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 current era, the recycling
process
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 is cumulative day by day and some nations follow it, preciously. There are certain countries that do not recycle their
waste
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 materials
such
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 as paper, glass and aluminium cans. Litter of these products
produced
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 more pollution and leads to deterioration. Here, I shall discuss some causes of it among with proper solution to get rid out from
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 issue. There are various reasons why people do not recycle their
waste
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.
Firstly
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, awareness about recycling. Majority of the population do not know anything about recycling technique, especially in a rural area.
Secondly
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,
carelessness
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 nature. People refuse to store these materials as
it
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they
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 occupy more space. So, they prefer burning which is a more convenient way.
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,
scant
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 of government facilities
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also
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 responsible for a reduction in the recycling rate. They provide
less vehicle
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fewer vehicles
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 to transport
this
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 litter from home. In some developing countries, resources are less compared to developed nations so they do not encourage recycling. To mitigate the issues related to recycling, the government should make certain criteria. They can increase resources
which
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needed in the
process
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 of
waste
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 management.
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 that, spread awareness about the benefits of these
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process
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processes
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. Start some
campaign
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campaigns
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 regarding
litters
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litter
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 management and dangerous
effect
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effects
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 on health. At the school level, it is a crucial thing to teach pupils about
recycling
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the recycling
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process
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. It may help in future,
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also
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too
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.
To sum up
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, there is no denying the fact that
recycling
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the recycling
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process
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required
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requires
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 more time, equipment, energy and labour
intensive
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apply
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.
Although
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 it devotes enormous benefits to our country by providing more materials
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 alleviation of
waste
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion need to be more developed and clearly related to the topic. Provide more specific examples to support your main points. Use transition words and phrases to improve the logical flow of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph follows a clear structure with a topic sentence and supporting details.
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The essay addresses the question, but it would benefit from a more comprehensive development of ideas. Provide more specific examples and elaborate on the causes and solutions to encourage recycling. Ensure that all aspects of the task prompt are fully addressed in the essay.

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