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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In recent times, there has been huge increased in the number of vehicles on the urban road which has lead to many issues
such
 as traffic congestion, stressful travel, road rage and so on. In
this
 essay, I will elucidate the factors leading to
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 roads and
also
, the effective measures which are required to overcome these hurdles.
To begin
 with, the primary reason for congestion on the highway is
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 availability of cars at
an economical prices
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 which leads to
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ncrease in
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umber of vehicles everywhere. Nowadays, everybody can afford one or the other mode of
transportion
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transportation
such
 as
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ar,
two wheeler
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 or trucks etc.
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,
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 due to less
accessibilty
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accessibility
accessible
 and less frequency of public services
such
 as buses or subways, people generally opt to use their private car
instead
. Most of the developing countries like India doesn't have
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effective traffic management due to which people prefer to travel in their private cars rather than using
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government
 facilities because it saves time and gives privacy to each person,
also
 increases the mobility of an individual. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, if
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overnment decides to invest some funds towards the local transportation and makes it not only approachable but
also
, economical. Apart from
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ower class, the middle class would
also
 drop the idea of taking private conveyance
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 and may start using the public mode of transport for their travel.
Moreover
, strict rules regarding owning cars should be practised. Like in Singapore, a family can have two cars and if they wish to buy a new car they have to return the old one. In
this
 way number of cars would not increase drastically and will
also
 aid in controlling other damaging factors like pollution, road accidents etc. To recapitulate, there are many factors which lead to
traffi
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traffic
 congestion in urban states.
However
 with strict rules and regulations by government and more
acessibilty
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accessibility
 of
pubilc
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public
 transportation and with support of the public, one can easily overcome the problem of traffic in any country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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