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Some believe that charitable organisations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 a large number of people consider that only native citizens in need ought to have an opportunity to receive charity help, other people believe that all people in the world should gain donated
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haritable organization. Personally, I support the former view because people from poorest countries without local charities will die without life-essential foods even though crime rates of
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ountry can be lower by supporting domestic low-incomes residents. Admittedly, some people believe that it is
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atter to help domestic poorest people to decrease crime rates in their own country.
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 is because low-income citizens often commit a crime to cover their essential needs for survival. If people have
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money
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haritable organization, they will be able to bye crucial foods and goods,
therefore
 they will not have to get it by illegal way. It is often supposed that the help to native residents is the key to safe living conditions for the whole country. On the
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, I side with those who believe that all people in the world, especially from poorest countries, deserve
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receive charity because it can help them survive while
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overnment could not help own citizens. There are a huge number of people in need who do not have enough pure water and foods. Not only can contribute
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 lack of essential things health problems
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 will they lead to death from thirsty and hungry.
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, in some
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people can survive only by helping from countries with
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igher quality lifestyle. In conclusion, while some people believe that only native citizens can receive have help from donators, others believe that all people in the whole world should to receive
such
 kind of help to stay alive without enough quantity of
money
 for water and foods .
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 people from different countries.
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