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Nowadays we are producing more and more waste? What are causes of this ? What can be done to help reduce the amount of waste we produce?

#waste #amount
Summer vacations give us a chance to explore new things. We can adopt new hobbies like painting, dancing, singing and more during
this
 time.
Furthermore
, it gives us a chance to visit our grandparents or to someplace abroad. Summer vacations bring all types of fun.
however
, these particular summer vacations were the most memorable for mem, when I have tried new things, experiencing new skills. The
last
 summer vacation, I decided that I should achieve a new thing, increase my knowledge about different fields of life.
Therefore
, I began to know about neuroscience, which describes every section of our body, how we feel, sense, react....etc. By the time I became more curious about neurology. I spent my holiday searching for neuroscientists' life and how to be a neurologist.
Hence
,
this
 data helped me to determine my dream and inspire me to reach it.
Besides
 that, I have planned to get rid of each negative energy I had or felt.
Thus
, I chose to try a new thing every single day extra to my responsibilities,
such
 as cooking, shopping, discovering a new place...etc. I found that doing these items, made me more active, creative, and productive. conclusively, I deduced that the summer vacation can be the best occasion for making a variety of tasks we can get benefit from it beyond, having perfect time with our relatives and friends and watching movies "having fun".
Although
, we need to manage our moments to avoid wasting any single moment.
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