Some people think success comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are important. Discuss both points and share opinion.

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Success has

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ifferent meaning for people across

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the

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lobe. It is true for some people it might mean hard

work

and

deterination

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determination

but for others

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it may mean

money

and

appearance

However

, I believe, success is a mix of both. It is often seen that those who are considered successful as per the social

standanrds

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standards

including

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celebrities, sports personalities or business leaders, all of them have hard

work

, determination and

appearance

in common

in contrast

to only burning might night oil or simply putting good looks to use.

On the other hand

money

and

appearance

are often seen as essential

attributesI

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attributes

behind a successful person in comparison to diligent effort towards goal. I feel, irrespective of

money

and good looks that a person has, s/he can never be

succesful

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successful

if s/he does not

work

hard.

Thus

money

and

appearance

can a role in working towards success yet cannot replace focused

work

towards a target. To conclude, people can believe hard

work

and determination or

money

and

appearance

as significant for success but these can never replace the value of painstaking hard

work

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etermination that leaders put in.

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Some people think success comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are important. Discuss both points and share opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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