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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Over recent years, as the working
life
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 is continuously evolving, the
job
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 market needs to keep up its pace.
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 issue arises especially with the advent of "globalization", a term recently coined by the media to convey that, among all the things,
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 is now given the opportunity to get a
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 in a different country than the
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 they were born.
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 evolution
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 enables
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 to secure a new position way faster, since it is no more limited to
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 country and it has access to a greater number of
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 adverts.
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, I would discuss the view of keeping the place for your entire career. It could lead to some advantages. After a learning period, you could do your work quite easily, as you know how to manage every incident that comes up and every situation that happens.
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, as an example, working in the same company might allow you to have a regular
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, with no hiccups, with the same old friends and without any major stress. Turning to the other side of the argument, changing work every two years has a great impact on your
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 profile. You can get exposed to different challenging environments and stimuli, and gain diverse skills.
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, accepting a position in a foreign country would be a fantastic experience, not only for your curriculum but
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 for your personal growth. As an example of that, I know of a friend of mine who moved to Japan, and the cultural shock helped him in appreciating other cultures and becoming more open-minded. To sum up, there are drawbacks and positive aspects of both of the views. I would say that depend on what are you searching for.
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, I would prefer the
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 option for sure. Even though I would not have a stressless
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, I will get some grateful experience from my personal and working
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.
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  • Corporate ladder
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  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
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