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Many people find it difficult to give speech or presentation in public. Some people suggest that schools should teach children to speak in public. How is it important to speak in public? Do youagree or disagree that school should teach at school.

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Addressing a group of
people
 often instil fear in the mind of some
people
. It may be suggested that in order to prepare
students
 for a confident public talk schools should start motivating them from an early age.
Firstly
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 of all,
students
 should be taught about the importance of interacting confidently in public. For the development of charisma , it is necessary to be presentable.
The working
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people
, who are not good at presentations, may not have an opportunity to enhance
the
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career
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 in
the
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 desired
field
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. If a person is hesitant to make a point, he might
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 behind others.
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 of confidence could sometimes lead to big problems in life. To tackle the problem, schools could consider including a class for personality development in the curriculum. Making the
students
 practice speaking in public may help them overcome fear.
Moreover
, encouraging presentations and providing feedback
at the end
 of each presentation might improve the charm to
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 extent.
On the other hand
, it may not be the sole responsibility of the educational institution to motivate
students
, as they spend a great deal of time with
the
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 family as well. Providing a carefree environment and avoiding pointing out mistakes in front of other
people
 might be helpful for kids in getting rid of shyness. The encouragement by the family would help the adolescents to inherit bold behaviour. To aggregate, teaching the importance of presenting well, may motivate
students
 to improve
the
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 performance in the desired fields and the schools could play a significant role in developing
the
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 person's identity
. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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