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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Buying
car
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 individually becoming popular among different parts of the world. In
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ast 30 years, owing own
car
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 numbers are raised at
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xtreme rate in different big cities across
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orld and becoming
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eason for the huge traffic jam problems.
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eason for jam and how
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overnment put different alternatives to reduce
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sage of cars. I
am completely agree
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 with the statement that , rapid growth in
car
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 numbers makes the cities congested . Nowadays, roads in the cities
are look
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 like market place everywhere you look around on roads you will find cars, buses and motorbikes. More and more
peole
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people
 prefer to travel in their own
car
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 to go for office
instead
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 of going
in
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 public
transport
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sydney
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it
take
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then
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mintues
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minutes
 to travel only 5
killometer
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kilometre
kilometres
 in the busiest time of the
day
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,
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ituation is going worse
day
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day
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these traffic
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 are increasing at
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lying rate.
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, survey from holmes university shows that
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in
next
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 3-5 years
government
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 need to ban cars on
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articular
day
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 to avoid
these huge congestion
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this huge congestion
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 on roads. In order to avoid big jams on roads centre should aware people to use public
transport
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 for office purpose .
Government
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 need to give special discount on public
transport
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 like cheaper rates for travel
in
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 buses or trains so more and more people prefer to go
in
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 public
transport
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overnment can increase the private insurance prices of cars which will encourage the people to go for buses.
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, in Melbourne centre decided to give
half price
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 fair in morning bussy hour time and same in
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vening time for trains and all other public
transport
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 which reduces more
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then
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 40% of
on road
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 traffic. In conclusion, rapid growth in cars becoming
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eadache for all if
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overnment should not take action on
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 soon
this
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 problem will become
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ajor concern . So
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overnment should start taking necessary action from now to save congestion on roads.

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