many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation has more advantages or more disadvantages.

A numerous
of
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people have
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oint of view about
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edicate majority of their
time
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their
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minority of their
time
to do their hobbies.
This
essay will analyse the pros of
this
issue and provides a logical conclusion. No one can deny the fact that mental and health
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issue
issues
has
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because of job pressure.
This
means the more someone
work
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the more
their
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sacrified
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sacrificed
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their healthy mind and body to
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ituation that can
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them to fall ill.
Firsly
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ob is demanding workers to finish the task on
time
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ateline of the company, which causes several
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such
as headache and stress.
Therefore
, workers do not have much
time
to
relaxing
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their body and mind.
Hence
, they are falling sick and absence from
work
in order to
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medical help.
On the other hand
, having enough
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proportion
of
time
for
lesure
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leisure
activity is necessary.
However
, detoxing worker's mind from
work
presure
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pressure
can avoid
from
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m
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edical issue
such
as dizzy and
depretions
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depressions
depression
.
For instance
, fishing can be one of many hobbies that can be done during
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leisure
time
to escape for a while from
work
routines.
Thus
, after doing
this
, they back can enjoy
to do
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their job without being stress.
However
,
work
and hobby are equal in order to get a
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balance
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life. To conclude,
although
work
is necessary to support
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expenses, having leisure
time
is more important to rebalancing life, both of them has to get enough proportion. I strongly believe leisure
time
has many
benefit
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which makes worker
work
betterand
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better and
this
idea need to
be support
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by every
companies
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company
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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