many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation has more advantages or more disadvantages.
A numerous
of
people have Verify preposition usage
apply
p
oint of view about Add an article
a
d
edicate majority of their Add an article
the
time
for work
and spare their
minority of their Change the pronoun
the
time
to do their hobbies. This
essay will analyse the pros of this
issue and provides a logical conclusion.
No one can deny the fact that mental and health isuue
has Correct your spelling
issue
issues
been increase
because of job pressure. Change the verb form
been increasing
been increased
This
means the more someone work
the more Change the verb form
works
their
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they're
they are
sacrified
their healthy mind and body to Correct your spelling
sacrificed
sacrifice
s
ituation that can Add an article
a
the
causes
them to fall ill. Change the verb form
cause
Firsly
, Correct your spelling
Firstly
First
j
ob is demanding workers to finish the task on Add an article
the
a
time
due to d
ateline of the company, which causes several Add an article
the
problem
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problems
such
as headache and stress. Therefore
, workers do not have much time
to relaxing
their body and mind. Change the form of the verb
relax
Hence
, they are falling sick and absence from work
in order to seeking
medical help.
Change the verb
seek
On the other hand
, having enough propotion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
time
for lesure
activity is necessary. Correct your spelling
leisure
However
, detoxing worker's mind from work
presure
can avoid Correct your spelling
pressure
from
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apply
m
edical issue Add an article
a
such
as dizzy and depretions
. Correct your spelling
depressions
depression
For instance
, fishing can be one of many hobbies that can be done during the
leisure Remove the article
apply
time
to escape for a while from work
routines. Thus
, after doing this
, they back can enjoy to do
their job without being stress. Change the verb form
doing
However
, work
and hobby are equal in order to get a Change the verb form
balanced
balance
life.
To conclude, Correct your spelling
balanced
although
work
is necessary to support life
expenses, having leisure Replace the word
living
time
is more important to rebalancing life, both of them has to get enough proportion. I strongly believe leisure time
has many benefit
which makes worker Change to a plural noun
benefits
work
betterand
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better and
this
idea need to be support
by every Change the verb form
be supported
companies
.Change to a singular noun
company
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...