many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation has more advantages or more disadvantages.

A numerous

of

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people have

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oint of view about

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edicate majority of their

time

for

work

and spare

their

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minority of their

time

to do their hobbies.

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essay will analyse the pros of

this

issue and provides a logical conclusion. No one can deny the fact that mental and health

isuue

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issues

has

been increase

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because of job pressure.

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means the more someone

work

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the more

their

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sacrified

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sacrificed

sacrifice

their healthy mind and body to

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ituation that can

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them to fall ill.

Firsly

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,

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ob is demanding workers to finish the task on

time

due to

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ateline of the company, which causes several

problem

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such

as headache and stress.

Therefore

, workers do not have much

time

to

relaxing

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their body and mind.

Hence

, they are falling sick and absence from

work

in order to

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medical help.

On the other hand

, having enough

propotion

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proportion

of

time

for

lesure

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leisure

activity is necessary.

However

, detoxing worker's mind from

work

presure

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pressure

can avoid

from

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m

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edical issue

such

as dizzy and

depretions

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depressions

depression

.

For instance

, fishing can be one of many hobbies that can be done during

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leisure

time

to escape for a while from

work

routines.

Thus

, after doing

this

, they back can enjoy

to do

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their job without being stress.

However

,

work

and hobby are equal in order to get a

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balance

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life. To conclude,

although

work

is necessary to support

life

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expenses, having leisure

time

is more important to rebalancing life, both of them has to get enough proportion. I strongly believe leisure

time

has many

benefit

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which makes worker

work

betterand

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better and

this

idea need to

be support

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by every

companies

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.