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wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people in the world argue about how to tackle the problem of refugees. Some parts of society believe that rich countries should accept refugees more than the amount they have had and give them basic needs
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 as a permanent place to live and food. I personally stand in between the argument of agreeing and disagree. The
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 reason to support the statement is that wealthy countries are generally believed to have a better income compared to the countries refugees come from. Better prosperity follows better income
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 so that
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 rich countries are able to provide basic needs for their people and the refugees as well.
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, there are a ton of non-government organizations who help refugees work and establish their program in rich countries. Compared to the developing countries, these organizations are more common in developed countries
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 as UN Migration in Australia, UK, Canada, and
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SA. They have expertise people to handle the problems of refugees.
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, the needs of refugees are the responsibility of their home
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. Refugees are residents of their home
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 who are suffering from an unfair situation so that they choose to move out and look for a better life. It means that the problem happened because of the failure of their
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 so that it is
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 their obligation to tackle the problem.
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, refugees are the people who need to be trained to be independent. If a
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 always supports them, they tend to be lazy and dependent on the help of others. Overall, it is a good thing if a rich
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 can support refugees with their basic assistance, but in my opinion
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the refugees itself need to rise and fight for their own life.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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