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Job satisfaction is more important than earning a high salary.

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Satisfaction
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 is more important than our salary. I partially agree with that idea. There are lots of advantages to
job
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satisfaction
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. At the same time, there are lots of disadvantages, too.
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 of all, Everyone can have as a
job
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 what they want to be. If they
don’t
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 like their
job
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, we feel unhappy ourselves. Eventually, they start to be exhausted. Because who doesn’t do what they like, or if they
don’t
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 contribute anything in their career, even they earn high amounts of money, they
don’t
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 want to work at all.
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, If anyone has
job
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satisfaction
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, they want to go to work happier and they would be more successful in their career. They can improve their project more efficiently. If they
Don’t
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 earn enough money, eventually they feel uncomfortable and embarrassed in our
life
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. nowadays, unfortunately, Money is becoming the most important value in our
life
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. Especially in Turkey, day by day, every item is getting more expensive. Even if we are not married,
life
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 is still expensive. If we marry and we had a child,
life
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 is getting harder,
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 we have
job
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satisfaction
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, We couldn’t be happy when we
don’t
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 make ends meet. When they Don't buy what their children and their spouse want, They will be disappointed about
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. It will lead to them feel the invaluable person. Overall, Earning Money is important as much as our
job
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satisfaction
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. In these situations, balance is really important. People never being happy without Money and
job
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satisfaction
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.
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, some people can be happy wither Money or
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satisfaction
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. It depends on people’s expectations.

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