Due to television and the internet it is easier today for a large number of people to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development?

Modern technologies like TV and
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Internet
help many people to be known effortlessly; obviously,
this
does not produce the best content.
On the contrary
, easy fame attracts the
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and clears the way for them to spread their ideas.
Firstly
, being famous becomes equivalent to being shocking.
That is
due to the fact that a picture is always more
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than a written word.
Thus
, some social media attention seekers are competing to do the most dangerous actions, like climbing a tower
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or jumping over a cliff with no safety
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. These efforts are mainly to draw more traffic to their web profiles. In return, a web page with high traffic generates more money through advertisements.
As a result
, going to the extreme helps to boost the person's fame and wealth.
Secondly
, because television and
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are mostly not strictly regulated, governments have loose hands over its contents.
In other words
, criminals and perverts have a safe haven to get famous and
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create whatever trend they wish. A clear example
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the previous is how
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the terrorist groups in Syria promoted their actions, and successfully recruited followers through the internet. Alternatively, previous terrorist groups in the eighties and the nineties were less famous because they lacked these modern tools;
hence
, had fewer followers.
Consequently
, criminals can easily influence the masses in a
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medium.
To sum up
, not all development is good development. Unfortunately, the easiness of becoming famous in today's world is creating multiple negative patterns;
furthermore
, it is
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tool for
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outlaws to reach their victims.
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