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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to Orr work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The line graph illustrates the percentages of CO2 emissions generated per person in four different countries in Europe between 1967 and 2007 Overall, the United Kingdom generated the largest amount of CO2 emissions within all the countries. The carbon emissions increased in Italy and Portugal whereas it decreased in Sweden and the UK. In 1967, the UK was the country with the largest carbon emissions, with over 10 tonnes.
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 rose sharply from 1967 to 1977, over ten tonnes of CO2
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 figure decreased dramatically seating at 6,5 approximately. By 2007,
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 Portugal was generating only 1,5 tonnes of CO2 emissions,
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 per person remained stable. 4 tonnes of CO2
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